Re: Some concrit
Addressing things in any old order:
* Thanks for pointing out the missing word - fixed now. * I tend to feel Sephiroth will have observed at least some of the reaction of newly minted soldiers to combat, and particularly combat involving humans, as a result of the war in Wutai. As a result, while he may not understand why some people go into shock after killing something for the first time (or badly wounding it, as in Nesa's case), he does know it happens, and knows how to deal with the aftermath. * Yes, that run-on sentence is awkward. At that, it's the second draft of said awkwardness, and the only thing that can be said in its favour is that the first draft was *worse*. * The choice of a shotgun as Nesa's weapon of choice was influenced by Heinlein - or to be more specific, The Number of the Beast. There's a description there of a shotgun shooting out the pellets in a cone, rather like a firehose, and it stuck with me. So when I decided that Nesa was going to be a lousy shot, I handed her the shotgun.
[PS: Given my knowledge of guns is entirely from books, the knowledge that I picked the right one for the job is a big boost. Thanks!]